What is paradise like?

[Rio]

(OOC: please if you post here I would prefer if you post at least 100 words. If you cant its fine but Please try. www.wordcounttool.com/ here is a word counter tool.)

Rio watched as the sun rose over the rocky hills she laid on her perch at the top of a over pass, her dark fur shined in the rays of light that bounced off her fur. She lifted her head as her legs straightened and her body stood tall in the morning air. Rio made her way down the side of the rocky slope her feet padded softly as they touched the rock.

Jumping from ledge to ledge she had found her way to solid ground, the oranges and yellow that filled the sky where turning to a clear blue sky.

She lifted her head to the sky and gave a call a howl to the heaven's for a safe journey to Paradise. She pondered about what was paradise like and how she would get there. Rio yawned as she walked placing every step carefully as not to slip on the rocky slope, the last thing she need was a broken leg.

Words: 162
Muse: ok
Notes: glad to be back

[Kit]

The rocky canyon held more then just the bleaching bones of the dead and small prey hiding in the cool shady cracks in the walls. A massive beast was walking through the canyon, his huge and dark gray pelt hard to miss against the sandy dirt floor of the canyon.
This beast was the equivalent of a tank in the wolf world, and he was well aware his size alone was usually enough to keep others away from him. As he walked his ears swiveled around towards the sound of shifting rocks. He continued to walk forward though he heard something leaping behind him.

[Rio]

Being in this lonlely land was uncomfortable to Rio she had no one to watch her back. She put the thought in the back of her mind. And kept on her jornery the jornery to the place that would save them all. All? who all would be there? what if her mission was all in vain what if when she got to the gate she could not enter. Rio's would came crashing down with this thought, but was quickly snapped back by a strange sent. She lifted her nose high in the air, it was a unfaimlar sent. Her ears lay flat to her skull an lifting her lip in defence. Rio's fur stood on end as she made her way to the new sent, her paws padded the ground lightly stepping over small rocks that would give her away. She take's slow deep breaths as she crawls over the rocks. Rio comes around rock to see a very large wolf, a male, he almost dwarfed her in size. Rio kept to her self following him far behind hoping to not be nocitced, she was going to follow him and see what this wolf was doing here, was he going to paradise?

Words: 202
Muse: good
Notes: none

[Kit]

ooc: Grammar check rio.
Try to stay in the same tense and watch your spelling and punctuation.
And for the future, scent is spelled with a c.
bic:
The dire wolf let his heavy paws slowly drag across the soft ground, all the while his ears swiveled behind him. He sniffed the passing breeze but continued in is direction.
He was aware of another wolf in the area. Judging by the scent, it was a female. He noticed it was a single scent, and he assumed she was alone. He didn't care though... as long as she was no threat to him, he didn't care what she did. What he did care about was the rumbling in his stomach. Kosei shook his massive furry body and finally stopped his trek to rest in a shaded area. He groomed his paws and licked the shaded rocks, absorbing the slight amount of moisture on his dry tongue.

[Rio]

OOC: oh sorry I was kinda in a hurry I'll be sure to look over it better.

Rio slowly creeping up behind the massive wolf her heart hastened its pace as she grew ever closer to the large male. Placing her ruff paw pads down against the hard rock, she lay her body flat to the ground watching as the brute come to rest under a shady place. Rio's eyes narrowed as she looked over the long and large body. She couldn't believe how large this wolf was, no wolf should be that massive. As she lay there on the cool rock the sun rose higher in the sky warming her body. She wondered if this wolf was hostile, there was only one way to find out. She lifted her head raising her body up off the ground and stepped out as he was gathering what little water there was on the rock face. Rio moved slowly standing right in front of him, she spoke "Hello I'm Rio, If you don't mind me asking are you heading to paradise?" She stood there waiting for a reply or to run.

Words: 171
Muse: ok
Notes: none

[Kit]

Kosei turned his massive head towards Rio, unsurpised by the other wolf's sudden appearance. His eyes looked over the smaller wolf and saw no threat. He looked behind her and saw no other creatures then sloly returned his gaze to Rio. "No." He answered simply. He turned back to the shade and let his head rest on his oversized paws. "Introducing yourself to strays like that will get you killed some day." He added.

[Rio]

Rio stared at the large wolf with surprise in her eyes that he would say such a remark to her. She lifted her head high in the air, her muzzle tightened and she curled her lip up letting a small growl out. Her only reply to this was "Well if so at least I would die with pride!" She turned around heading back the way she came to continue on her journey to paradise. Her body tense and her mind running with reasons why the male was so up tight. She rounded the rock the she had came from leaving the male to do as he wishes. She would normally stay and try to dig more into it but on this day she was rather willing to be alone. If the male wished to fallow she would then intend to ask more, but she only sighed as her paws crossed the land that was so harsh as this.

Words: 157
Muse: ok
Notes: none

[Kit]

Kosei's teeth shimmered in the light, but not in a snarl. In a laugh. He was actually lauging at her with a deep hearty laugh that shook through his whole oversized dark gray body. "Well Pride...if you are headed to paradise" He said, letting his voice grow loud as the female grew further away. "You are headed the wrong way!" He finished before he too stood up and began walking. He followed his original trail, having no intrest in the false pride of a lost wolf.
Kosei didn't see how her question was rpideful at all. All he saw was foolishness. Wanting to live was not denouncing his pride.... not that he cared if he had it anyway. He had given up such physical restrictions when he had lost his pack....